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June 14 2010

HideI hide amongst my smile and laughs,I hide away my pain.I hide amongst the memories,that lay inside my brain.I hide away the hurt and hate,I hide away the tears.I hide away my screams and life,I hide away my fears.I hide away, behind my eyes,I do not let you see.That all this life, this pain, this talk,greatly destroys me.

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16 years ago

I see that as a short poem that many people on this earth have experienced the feeling for at one time in their life... sadly some out there still feel that way... thankfully some have surpassed those feelings... and some are yet to experience them... I for one am in the "surpassed" category Nicely written!! Tiger x

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16 years ago

nice one dragon...My turn now...There was a guy called wildeWho acted like a childYes, he was a dickhis first name was nickwith comments to get you riled...cheersJose...

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16 years ago

Dragon & Jose I admire people who can put words together!Cheers Nev

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16 years ago

Here here dragon.....nice one tooshay Jose- put that young whippersnapper back in hes place......excellent come back.... Cheers

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16 years ago

That's closer to a limmerick than it is to a poem Jose. :p As for dragonfly... the thing that sets a good poem from an ordinary one, for one thing, is its ability to induce empathy into the reader. Now... I read it.. and I got it... felt it, but Nick read it... and obviously your poem failed to induce empathy in his mind. So now we have to ask ourselves... why. Maybe Nick lacks empathy... for certain, given that his response is devoid of any consideration for how you will feel about it, that could be one reason... but people are complicated... maybe Nick felt empathy and didn't want to admit it... that's another possibility... or maybe your peom is too trite for someone as intellectually superior as Nick percieves himself to be. Well, I'll let you decide, Dragonfly. The real beauty of this poem, from my perspective, is that it is provocative enough to open a window to a mind through which connections can be discovered or sought, or lolz ..discarded.... and I just do not mean your mind dragonfly. So I say Nice work. Hugs Stalky

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16 years ago

Thank you for sharing that Dragonfly. Lol Stalky... a limerick is a 5 line poem. My favourite lolol...Hugs... Mrs P'

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